The character that I have imagined is a boy who is called West Marshall. He's a teenager of fourteen years. West is an orphan, his parents died in a car accident when he was two years. He is British.
The boy is very tall for his age. He has very dark hair, and eyebrow and like his father, and he has blue eyes like the sky without clouds and like his mother. He also has a small nose, and he looks like all his family, but most particularity like his grand-parents. West Marshall, after his parent's deaths, became a boy with a dark side. He became a naughty boy, a prankish (specially with the others child) and a cheeky boy. He is not respectful with the adults. The boy is a loner, with no friends, and he has also invented imaginary friends. West was an orphan in his full childhood. Nobody wanted him because he looked too much like a bad boy, and he maybe has powers, so the people think that he is malevolant. Lot of them say that his eyes sometimes changes colors, for become red like blood. Many of them also call him the orphan child vampire.
you have made a great description and your character is captivating. you could use more coumpound adjective next time. you keep suspense at the end , I like it but I want to know more !
ReplyDeleteYour description is great! But, like Elsa said it, you could use compound adjectives in the aim to complexifed it.
ReplyDeleteI find that your work is organised; at first we have a general description, then that's the physical description and you finished with his personnality. That's a good point!
At last, I also think that your character is interesting, you have a good imagination! Great done!