Thursday, February 4, 2016

Harry Potter's description

This character is Harry Potter, who comes from J. K. Rowling's novel. He has blue eyes and he has black hair. He usually wears black glasses. On the photo, he is wearing a black and red jacket, and a white shirt. He also has a red and yellow tie. He is holding a magic wand. He has a scar on his forehead. He is a sorcerer.
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10 comments:

  1. UnknownFebruary 4, 2016 at 10:33 AM

    I think that's a good description of Harry Potter. You very well described what you see in the picture.
    I just find that's a pity that it is not a little more complex because you often repeated "He has"...
    But it stays a good presentation! So good work Marie

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  2. UnknownFebruary 4, 2016 at 12:25 PM

    For me, your description is thrilling. You begin by his face for finish on his clothes. As Auriane I think there are a bit too much repetition of "He has".
    But it's still a nice descrpition of the most famous wizard.

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  3. UnknownFebruary 4, 2016 at 1:14 PM

    This is a good and simple description. I agree with Simon and Auriane you repeat a lot "he has". You could use compound adjectives for exemple. It's a black and white picture. Do you really see the colors? But it's still a good description, good jod Marie!

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  4. UnknownFebruary 4, 2016 at 3:13 PM

    Your description is really good, but you start all your sentences with "He is/has". Also, you say a lot of things that you can't know with the picture, like "he is a sorcerer". You just don't know if he is, even if he has a magic wand, so it's not his physical appearance. But it's good, because there's no big mistakes and it's clear.

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  5. Julie BelenFebruary 4, 2016 at 10:52 PM

    Your description is very good Marie ! Your vocabulary is very simple for read and rich. But you said lot of "he has" but i like your description, very good job.

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  6. UnknownFebruary 4, 2016 at 10:55 PM

    It's a really good description you've made about Harry Potter. You juste repeat he has too much like the others said. Good job !
    Elsa

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  7. Julie BelenFebruary 4, 2016 at 11:05 PM

    Joanie Bimbenie: I like your description you're the good vocabulary and is clear. Good job.

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  8. Julie BelenFebruary 4, 2016 at 11:07 PM

    Erika demeuleneare: I love your description, it's very clear and simple, good job !

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  9. Camille TouatiFebruary 8, 2016 at 10:05 AM

    I think your description is clear, simple, but effective! We can easily imagine how your character looks like without any picture. Good job Marie!

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  10. UnknownMarch 7, 2016 at 7:59 AM

    I expect the writings of eva carrasco of invention and Julie belen

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